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Post by [no_name_specified] on May 30, 2005 17:17:35 GMT -5
Hi, everybody! I wanted to do a fanfic and now I'm doing it! It may take a couple days to write, but anywho...just a heads up. There may or may not be anything here for a day or two, but I'll be as fast as I can! ;D
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Post by [no_name_specified] on May 30, 2005 17:45:04 GMT -5
Part One
"Hey, Kiba! Wait up will ya?! I can't be carrying Cheza all the time you know! It's your turn!" said Hige, shifting Cheza to the other arm. (in wolf form it would look like he's pushing her into a better position on his back) Kiba looked behind and stood there waiting for them to catch up. While they stumbled up to him, a great gust of wind had suddenly picked up from a small breeze. As soon as the wind got to a blinding whirl of dust and mist, a tall dark shape was standing before them. It was the third generation child of the Darcia family staring at them through holes in a mask that was as white as any snow, and with markings as black as a raven's wing. Darcia looked at them from behind his mask. Which he then removed to reveal his face and his legendary wolf eye. He glared at Kiba with a smirk. "I'll kill you.You have gotten in my way for the last time. Do not hinder me again...Kiba..." he sneered. And then, shifting into a wolf he turned and ran into the storm.
It had been a few days and the wolves were wondering what was going on since the storm had not settled. Cheza looked up at Kiba with a start as if she could tell his puzzled state. "Kiba," she said softly, "Why do you wonder? This one knows it will be alright, you don't need to be afraid." For the first time in Kiba's life he growled at Cheza. "Not afraid?! Who said I was?! I was just thinking about what that Noble meant. I've never hindered him, I've never gotten in the way of anybody! He doesn't know what he's talking about!" "Kiba! Be quiet!" Tsume barked over his pain. He had been walking for days and felt like he was in a dream. Never mind he had been carrying Cheza for the longest time. Kiba looked at him. "Fine, I will be quiet! Maybe I was better off alone. You would have been a better leader for them anyway." Kiba said gesturing to the others. "But what about Cheza?" asked Toboe softly. "She was meant to lead you, and you alone, to Paradise. She is of no use to us I'm sorry to say." "I'll be! I'm going with Kiba no matter what!" said Hige, hoisting Cheza from Tsume's arms. Kiba ran away shouting, "I've always been alone!" stopping he whispered to himself, "I wouldn't need even you, Hige..." He ran on. His comerades stood there too stunned to speak. Cheza whispered something in Hige's ear. Hige nodded and put her on the ground. He motioned for everybody to sit in a circle around Cheza. They weren't sure what was going on, but they did it anyway. Once they were all seated there, Cheza started to sing her lonesome lullaby. Whether it was to call Kiba back, or if it was for something else, not one of the wolves could tell. They all felt like howling and so one by one they howled in the storm that blew over the land. But the wind slowed to a slow, sleepy breeze as Cheza sang and the wolves howled.
Kiba ran on and never stopped once to look back. Out of nowhere perpendicular to Kiba, ran another wolf. It was black with the oddest purple highlights They ran and bit at eachother for sometime until they were standing looking at one another. "Darcia!" Kiba spat. "Heh, you're the Lone White Wolf, I propose...still looking for something you'll never find?" without warning, he dashed and attacked Kiba while he was gathering the little strength he had left from the first attack.
The wolves stopped howling and Cheza still hummed slightly. Far off in the distance they heard the most painful howl anyone will hear in their lifetime. It got their attention. They tried sniffing the air, but the wind was going in the other direction. Cheza stood stark still facing the smae way Kiba had taken off in. "Cheza...what is it? Do you know what it is?" said Hige in a trembling voice, thinking and hoping what he thought it was wasn't true. "The Noble..." Cheza whispered. She then threw her head back and screamed. "Kiba!
to be continued...
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Post by chezamaiden on May 30, 2005 18:12:25 GMT -5
Oh wow...awesome! Honestly...that last part gave me chills. It seems like an out of no where idea, but hey...it's still really good.
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Post by [no_name_specified] on Jun 1, 2005 14:29:51 GMT -5
thx. Cheza's screams always gave me the shivers, too. (((O.O)))
Yeah, I figured it'd be kind of noticable (sp?) seeing as it IS a right-off-the-top-of-my-head kinda story. I'm working on the next part...I'm afraid this is going to be kind of short compared to other fanfics that I've read here...
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Post by Rebelwolf on Jun 1, 2005 14:47:20 GMT -5
Another talented writer I've seen here.I wrote Hige fan-fic,sent it to some ppl,and I got a bad review from one of them.I hope the others like it somewhat....
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Post by Scarred Wolf on Jun 1, 2005 17:49:45 GMT -5
Another talented writer I've seen here.I wrote Hige fan-fic,sent it to some ppl,and I got a bad review from one of them.I hope the others like it somewhat.... Isnt that a little off topic here...? Well i liked it. It was really dramatic and showed your own creative take on the ending.
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Post by chezamaiden on Jun 1, 2005 17:54:49 GMT -5
Well...maybe a little off topic, but not to a bad extent I don't think. I do hope you post more Creedy.
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Post by [no_name_specified] on Jun 2, 2005 19:50:24 GMT -5
Part Two
Hige was in a panic and ran straight for Kiba, who was, if you can believe it, a couple miles away. Hige ran with the speed of wind to find Kiba. Cheza gasped and choked streaming tears as she could feel Hige leave. She knew Tsume was too weak to carry her again, and Toboe is too young and possibly not strong enough either. Cheza felt herself weaken with dispair. Tsume limped over to her quickly, picked her up with the remaining strength he had and started after Hige. "Come on, Toboe!" he said with all the strength he could muster for speech. Toboe ran to him and followed close behind, careful not to trip him.
Hige reached Kiba and Darcia was fading into the storm which failed to conquer the world. "Damn it!" he cursed the Noble. Turning to Kiba, who he could barely see lying in on the ground in the failing wind. Tsume and the others came up slowly as they, too, saw Kiba motionless. Finally paralized. His appearance was faltering inbetween wolf and human. "Kiba?" said Toboe, moving closer. As he did so, he saw that there was a large amount of blood near Kiba's head on the ground. Hige and Cheza came closer to look. Tsume just cursed Kiba for being an idiot for running off under his breath and didn't move. Kiba shook and gasped, "Cheza...why isn't it there? Why can't I see it? Where's Paradise...?" "Kiba..." Cheza whispered, brushing back his hair and revealing the open wound on his neck. He faltered. "I never thought I would never find Paradise...Cheza, help me find it....I know it's somewhere...." "You never did, Kiba. This one was meant to lead you there, yes, but your fate was different than this one had seen before. Paradise is where ever you want it to be, you just have to have the will to live." "So are you saying all we had to do to find Paradise was to die?!" Tsume cut in. "Yes, in a way, Tsume..." said Cheza, still stroking Kiba's hair. "Then why the hell did we have to find and use you?! Why couldn't have we died right where we were in that city?!" "I was driven to find something ever since my pack died in that fire...Tsume, we searched for it...we left that stink hole of a human city to find something that none but me and Cheza knew was real...." said Kiba. "My time here is all over...I can't see you guys anymore...my eyes are dark now...and my body feels numb and cold....he thrashed at me.....I knew you guys would be safe because now that I'm gone....he won't be back unless you try to pursue what I tryed to do....." said Kiba. "Lengthy speech for someone who's dead." Tsume complained, rubbing his ear. "I don't believe your crap! You can't die! You're the one who dragged us out here from a good life we lived before so you're going to get up and MOVE! Lead us there like you wanted to!" "Hey, Tsume...you said something of the like when I was half dead in that city of yours, remember?" "No, I don't! It's because of you I can't remember that place clearly enough to satisfy myself!" Tsume came over and kicked Kiba over. Kiba gasped as the wound on his neck opened farther and he lay flat, gasping for air. Tsume sank down as he looked at Kiba's wretched state. Kiba was paralized, neck split nearly in half by a deep bite, leg torn and broken, and numerous other wounds littered his body. "I told....you.....I can't move....I can barely....breathe......." he gasped. Being on his back it was harder to breathe. Never mind it had been hard enough to do that on his side. Cheza came over to him and held his head up on her lap. She could feel something. "Kiba...why?...did you...?" she said sadly. "Why, what?" said Hige. "I wish....I could see you again....good......bye......." Kiba's head sank motionless on Cheza's lap. "Kiba lied to us..." said Cheza, looking at Hige. "WHAT?! How the heck?" "Darcia will be coming back for us...This one is not sure if Kiba lied--" "Impossible," Hige muttered. "--or if this one can feel him coming..." Tsume had wandered off and found something of interest. He dragged it over to the others. It was the carcass of a black, yet somewhat purple, wolf. "That's that Noble! He's dead! How the heck...?" Hige said. "Who cares?" said Toboe, jumping around for joy amidst his sadness. "It's because he's dead that we can go to Paradise without worrying too much about being attacked!" "You know," said Tsume. "He has a point." "Yep!" Hige said. "He sure does. G'bye, Kiba. We sure will miss you. I hope to find you in Paradise when we get there." They started traveling again. Cheza leading the way now. They all sighed sadly, but a flicker of hope still kindled a secret fire in their hearts.
The End
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Post by [no_name_specified] on Jun 2, 2005 19:52:12 GMT -5
It was a bit short...only two parts.... but at the least I hope the second part is just as good the first part....
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Post by chezamaiden on Jun 2, 2005 21:44:03 GMT -5
Cool ending, but very sad for Kiba...
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Post by Scarred Wolf on Jun 3, 2005 0:03:20 GMT -5
I liked it all... but i didnt like Hige's last line. It seemed a little too staged and like, not caring. That's an interesting take on the ending though, very creative.
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Post by devinfire on Jun 3, 2005 1:09:45 GMT -5
Confusing at times but interesting. I just didn't like how they totaly got over Kiba's death so quickly, however I really find this interesting. It's like a your point of view on the ending in a story format. Nice job, but there are misleading parts... like how that purple wolf carcass was fount. How'd that happen? Did Kiba strike a fatal wound on Darcia before he left?
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Post by [no_name_specified] on Jun 3, 2005 22:50:03 GMT -5
Ummm... I was wondering about that myself, DevinFire... ^^;; I decided that the reason why Quent, Blue and Hubb weren't on the settings, was because they gave up on the wolves and wandered off. And in their own defence they managed to kill Darcia. WTG!
You can all call me the official murderer of Kiba!
Actually, the dialogue in Part Two I wasn't sure about, but since you guys were all itching for more I decided to go with what I had typed up then and there. I also didn't want to make Hige sound to yaoi-like attached to Kiba, so I did my best with his dialogue....since I got the seventh DVD from NetFlix the other day, I watched it and found out that yes, Hige did in fact have conversations with Kiba that made him sound like he was very attached to him. Not yaoi fasion, just, buddy-buddy kinda thing, ya know?
I wasn't sure how they would react to the death. They're some interesting people I tell ya. Try kything with them, very interesting...yes, I guess it did sound too much like an eager parting. ..sorry 'bout that...they're really supposed to be obsessing about it....
Anywho! Glad you liked it! I might do another one someday that is a bit longer...and less confusing. As in PLANNED and not OFF-THE-TOP-OF-MY-HEAD....^^;;
Also, don't be surprised if you find a rewriten Part Two in here at some point...
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Post by Scarred Wolf on Jun 3, 2005 23:35:27 GMT -5
well, i dont find it yaoi-ish at all, just food for yaoi fans. OMFG KIBA AND HIGE ARE FRIENDS AND THEY CHAT LIKE WOLF BRETHREN OMG THEY LOVE EACHOTHER, is what they are thinking. (small rant) im fine with yaoi pairings, i just dont like ppl INSISTING that the authors wrote it in the script. i mean, 2 wolves in the same pack cant act loving towards eachother without being LOVERS? *sigh* and even more so because hige has a girlfriend, is obsessed with girls, and kiba almost had sex with myu. ;D anyway yeah i was confused about the darcia thing too, but still good job.
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Post by devinfire on Jun 4, 2005 0:01:23 GMT -5
Ummm... I was wondering about that myself, DevinFire... ^^;; I decided that the reason why Quent, Blue and Hubb weren't on the settings, was because they gave up on the wolves and wandered off. And in their own defence they managed to kill Darcia. WTG! You can all call me the official murderer of Kiba! Actually, the dialogue in Part Two I wasn't sure about, but since you guys were all itching for more I decided to go with what I had typed up then and there. I also didn't want to make Hige sound to yaoi-like attached to Kiba, so I did my best with his dialogue....since I got the seventh DVD from NetFlix the other day, I watched it and found out that yes, Hige did in fact have conversations with Kiba that made him sound like he was very attached to him. Not yaoi fasion, just, buddy-buddy kinda thing, ya know? I wasn't sure how they would react to the death. They're some interesting people I tell ya. Try kything with them, very interesting...yes, I guess it did sound too much like an eager parting. ..sorry 'bout that...they're really supposed to be obsessing about it.... Anywho! Glad you liked it! I might do another one someday that is a bit longer...and less confusing. As in PLANNED and not OFF-THE-TOP-OF-MY-HEAD....^^;; Also, don't be surprised if you find a rewriten Part Two in here at some point... it's just, in part one Hige was all about remaining with Kiba. Hige was the one who ran after Kiba first after hearing the howl but I was really shocked at how he reacted at the end... he kinda brushed the incident off as if it was nothing but earlier he was showing great care for it. anyway, pretty good stuff man.
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